In my class Miss Paton shared with us a piece of writing in which we had to delete, take out words and change sentences. Here is my piece of writing.
Miss Paton’s copy
Miss Paton has a cat. His name is Oscar. He is a tabby cat. Oscar can be a pain in the neck. He likes to sniff my rubbish bin. He always come to my house wanting food. Oscar likes to fall asleep on my couch. He does not like my laptop computer. He would rather sit on my lap. Oscar would like me to give him the attention.
My copy
Miss Paton has a cat.his name is Oscar. He is a tabby cat. Oscar can be a pain in the neck. He likes to sniff my rubbish. He come to my house starving. Oscar likes to fall asleep on my couch.Oscar don’t like to sit on my laptop computer. He would rather sit on my lap. Oscar would like me to give him the attention.
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